Seun-Odukoya commented on the post, Sundown 0666. Pt 4
@Hymar… I don’t think the subtle insults are necessary. I simply spoke as a reader who did not understand and would not have you on hand to explain anything. No vex ehn? I apologize.
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, The Basics Are
Whoa. Didn’t think anyone still read this. Thank you!
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya posted an update: You Wouldn't Believe. What I Got Coming. Or...
You Wouldn’t Believe. What I Got Coming. Or Maybe You Will. You Won’t Be Ready. Though.
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, A Tale Of Reality
You tried to do something in there. For that, you get a commendation. “I used my hands to make way in the bush. My eyes saw so many absurd images; the grasses were big, long and endless; the sky was...
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, The rush
I like the story. It has promise. However, I think – I honestly think you should rewrite this. Your opening lines already suggested what we were reading, and the climax was just a confirmation of what...
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, The rush
@clemency… You just did. I’m flattered and honored. Trust me, you can do far better than that. Than me. Keep that in mind.
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, The rush
@sueddie… I HAve NO Idea what you’re going on about. Indeed – it has been like forever. How goes it?
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, Musings of a Single girl
Indulge me – please. “And that is the problem. A guy will say and do anything to win a girl over. He will change for you all in the name of being a better man. The famous “You make me want to be a...
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, A piece of me
It’s just sweet. Heartwarming. Nice. That too. Well done.
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, How I Fell
Stranger things have happened. Trust me. Scarlett? This is beautiful. Brilliant. Sweet. Intense. Well. Done.
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, I Heard You
Hmmm. Interesting. Is this about childbirth? Maybe if I understood I’d be able to comment more meaningfully.
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, Valentine's Day To Me
The story is… Let me try again. The story is deeply sad and somehow – as though ‘good things are not meant to last”. That said… “I never believed in Valentine’s Day. I still don’t believe in it, […]
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, 1, 2, 3 Disappear: Part 3
The idea is brilliant – as much as we’ve heard these stories I don’t think I’ve actually read one. Kudos. Execution; however could be better. Watch your narrative voice. The story sounds as though...
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, I Met Sam: Part 1
“‘hello boy’’ I was speechless, did not know what to say to the bleak looking lad” Someone who just said ‘hello boy’ cannot…should not be ‘speechless’. At least not in the same paragraph. “‘’No, it’s […]
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, O TI YO! (Drunk)
Hehehehehehehehehehehehehehe! Interesting. Definitely funny!
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, Am I not Beautiful?
One can’t be quite disciplined when critiquing poetry – but I do feel suggested or implied imagery might have made this a much bigger deal. It’s okay as poems go I guess…
View ArticleSeun-Odukoya commented on the post, Demons On Church Street: Episode Two
You should space out your paragraphs more, that makes your story easier to read – especially the dialogue. Good job.
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